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Deep inside it sleeps...
Waiting for a chance to awake...
It's a one and only thing...
But it's life's biggest mistake.

They can hurt you far more then you could amagine...
Your left cold and broken-hearted...
You wonder what happened...
Why your love parted.

Walking away with a hole inside...
Trying to fill the void...
Your love comes back to finish the job...
Leaving you utterly destroyed.

Everyone you know suspects something...
Asking you whats wrong...
You get up weakly...
Not saying anything you walk along.

You stop trusting people with much disgrace...
Looking at them all with a sour face...
Protecting youself with carefulness...
You know love is your greatest weakness.
©2008-2009 ~AppleChaosKiller
:iconapplechaoskiller:

Author's Comments

HAHA my emo-ish style is back to reak havic, but it suxs lol

another contest poem just rate 1-15 please and thank ya

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:icontoaakatsuki:
lol, out of 15?

10/15

It's decent, good concept, good vocabulary, but, um, spelling/grammar. :-/ You should read over your work before you submit it.. there shouldn't be typos and stuff.

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The world is not beautiful; therefore it is. ~ Kino no Tabi

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~Amaranth-Portal
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:iconapplechaoskiller:
ehh...i don't really care for that stuff

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"I stand alone to change this world, not to prove I'm the greatest, but to show everyone else hope and good still exist!"-AS

"I'm a fallen angel...I didn't fall cuz my wings got taken, I stayed cuz it's faster to save someone when ur on even ground"-AS
:iconsasukekisame:
yous is bringings the emos backs

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it takes alot to love someone but it is even harder to have them love you
:iconapplechaoskiller:
but its true

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"I stand alone to change this world, not to prove I'm the greatest, but to show everyone else hope and good still exist!"-AS

"I'm a fallen angel...I didn't fall cuz my wings got taken, I stayed cuz it's faster to save someone when ur on even ground"-AS
:iconsasukekisame:
yeah i guess

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it takes alot to love someone but it is even harder to have them love you
:iconblahbrooke:
I love it.
15 out of 15 love.
One of your works of art. It's just brilliant. :D

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I want to be remembered as the girl who always smiles even when her heart is broken.
And the one that could always brighten up your day even if she couldn\'t brighten her own.
:iconapplechaoskiller:
just a wee bit

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"I stand alone to change this world, not to prove I'm the greatest, but to show everyone else hope and good still exist!"-AS

"I'm a fallen angel...I didn't fall cuz my wings got taken, I stayed cuz it's faster to save someone when ur on even ground"-AS
:iconapplechaoskiller:
lol...well u should check the work of my rival :iconreki-sama:, i think she's better than me

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"I stand alone to change this world, not to prove I'm the greatest, but to show everyone else hope and good still exist!"-AS

"I'm a fallen angel...I didn't fall cuz my wings got taken, I stayed cuz it's faster to save someone when ur on even ground"-AS
:iconblahbrooke:
Hmm.. you seem to think everyone is lol.

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I want to be remembered as the girl who always smiles even when her heart is broken.
And the one that could always brighten up your day even if she couldn\'t brighten her own.
:iconapplechaoskiller:
well...so your agreeing on me?

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"I stand alone to change this world, not to prove I'm the greatest, but to show everyone else hope and good still exist!"-AS

"I'm a fallen angel...I didn't fall cuz my wings got taken, I stayed cuz it's faster to save someone when ur on even ground"-AS

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